Did you know that you can share your review or photo of this place on Google Maps instead? It would be really useful for future customers who are looking for more information about this place before visiting it. Your feedback may also be reviewed by the management of the mentioned place and therefore make changes to their service accordingly.
Your post looks ok, however I meant you can also share this information in a review on Google Maps if you wish.
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